Do you see any patterns?

One common pattern is the repetition of certain words. I tended to repeat the world “epidemic” more than what sounds normal and I think my essay would be much stronger if I replaced some “epidemics” with synonyms.

Do you rely on certain devices more than others?

One technique I used a little too often when writing my essay is transition words. Instead, I should transition from one topic to the next using full sentences to accurately link my topics so the paper flows smoothly.

Are there any passages that are hard to follow-and if so, can you make them easier to read by trying any of the other devices discussed in this chapter?

In some cases, I found it hard to use the devices listed in this chapter. However, I’m sure that there are definitely some parts of this essay that seem more sharp than smooth that need fixing. I can do this by lengthening my transitions and concluding paragraphs by flowing into the next topic, instead of making a claim that is unrelated to the subject being discussed in the previous paragraph.